[Internal-cg] public comment web page v3

[joseph alhadeff]

Colleagues:

As I read this material, I think we have most of the necessary elements, 
but or the non-initiated the flow might be confusing. I have added a 
couple of comments on where flow could be improved.  I have also 
suggested the inclusion of a diagram.

Unfortunately I can't engage in detailed drafting on this till Monday, 
but would be happy to if that is within the viable time-frame.

Joe



On 7/22/2015 9:27 AM, Manal Ismail wrote:
> Thanks Jennifer ..
>
> Thanks Lynn ..
> Please find attached and on Dropbox a few remarks marked in track changes ..
>
> Kind Regards
> --Manal
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Internal-cg [mailto:internal-cg-bounces at ianacg.org] On Behalf Of Jennifer Chung
> Sent: Tuesday, July 21, 2015 6:21 PM
> To: 'Lynn St.Amour'; internal-cg at ianacg.org
> Subject: Re: [Internal-cg] public comment web page v2
>
> Hi All,
>
> Please find the public comment web page v3 (final section links added, public comment date inserted) attached and linked below:
> Dropbox link to v3: http://icgsec.asia/1RN2v60
>
> All previous versions of this document have been preserved and moved to a different Dropbox subfolder called 'Web page materials' (CoordinationGroup > Web page materials): http://icgsec.asia/1MFLRyE
>
> All the latest versions of all materials for the ICG public comment period launch is available here for your review (CoordinationGroup > Public
> Comment): http://icgsec.asia/1OfxHW2
>
> Please let me know if you have any questions.
>
> Best Regards,
>
> Jennifer
>
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Internal-cg [mailto:internal-cg-bounces at ianacg.org] On Behalf Of Lynn St.Amour
> Sent: Tuesday, July 21, 2015 11:45 AM
> To: internal-cg at ianacg.org
> Subject: Re: [Internal-cg] public comment web page v2
>
> Hello everyone,
>
> just trying to move this forward in our chair's absence.
>
> Could the secretariat include relevant links (per the request below) and ensure the latest is posted on dropbox.
>
> ICG members, could we have any remaining comments on this by this Friday 24th July?  I will then incorporate the feedback and turn it around for final approval and posting.
>
> Must all be DONE by July 29th for start of public comment period,
>
> Best,
> Lynn
>
>
> On Jul 12, 2015, at 1:54 AM, Alissa Cooper <alissa at cooperw.in> wrote:
>
>> All,
>>
>> I've updated the public comment web page material [1] based on our
> discussions at the F2F and during our last call. I also did some editorial work on it. The Background and Summary sections are derived directly from the ICG report in the combined proposal.
>> Please review and provide your feedback. We will need to finalize this
>> by
> July 29 assuming we finish the proposal assessment this week.
>> I'm hoping that Lynn will be able to shepherd the process of
>> incorporating
> feedback and filling in the remaining placeholders since I will be mostly tied up with IETF matters next week.
>> Secretariat: If you could gather the links that should go in the final
> section, that would be great.
>> Thanks,
>> Alissa
>>
>> [1]
> https://www.dropbox.com/s/bx3hjc18zdjqxox/public-comment-web-page-v2.docx?dl
> =0
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